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The Violins Thread by `poetess:iconpoetess:

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The violin's thread

Like four seasons do
A butterfly that you are, flying upon my soul
Where has the time go to?
Tingling every inch of my bone
As I try to recall how you smile
And heavenly bow swaying from side to side
A shine lightens my eye.
A leer materializes within my heart. You glide.
Sweet violin, though we are apart
How I dream to hold you gently into my arms
I would stroke your strings... we start to play
I have nothing else to say
I fell in too deep while silence envelopes me.
And would it been different if I didn't love thee?





(c) 2002 d.g.fernandez
©2002-2009 `poetess
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Author's Comments

A Violin's Thread.

Story line
A man fell inlove with this girl he dreams about. saying that her hair flows like a sweet violin.
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trying to write on man's point of view about a girl's long black shinny hair. all comments are most welcome.

thanks in advance. hehe :p (Razz)



*note: I'm not a lesbian. ok.

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~cyril Jan 20, 2002, 9:47:55 AM
very nice, I like how you refer to violins in this, the stroking the strings... we start to play
good

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`dreamz13 Jan 20, 2002, 9:48:59 AM
I would have never compare a girl's hair with a violin. But this is a good one. Silky smooth.

8) (Cool) Do you know it is impossible to lick your elbow? 8) (Cool)
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~kittenish Jan 20, 2002, 9:49:10 AM
mmm... beautiful

rachel
oi to the punks Unimpressed , oi to the skins Disbelief , oi to the world and everybody wins Nod .
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`renonevada Jan 20, 2002, 9:51:22 AM
This is like a period piece, renaissance, or around there. That's the impression I get, anyway.

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`poetess Jan 20, 2002, 9:59:03 AM
as violins and flow of words are used in this poem, it is sort of in the renausance period.
uhm.. well.. I did try.

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~kabookie123 Jan 20, 2002, 10:06:16 AM
The wisps, as of a dream
Touch me, Tease me
Let me know
the way the wind blows. :P (Razz) ;D

Great poem....Well...um...Really great poem. A new favorite addition :) (Smile)

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~necropsy Jan 20, 2002, 10:55:00 AM
hmmmm .. dont think the "thee" fits. but all in all a seperb poem.

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`frail Jan 20, 2002, 11:33:15 AM
beuatiful

very much like a period piece, I agree

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`klf Jan 20, 2002, 2:38:14 PM

i can hear the words played, love your imagery.
lovely work!
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